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And so...
by elfstone
Originally published on November 9, 2015 in Poetry        


This is still too raw.


And so …

And so it comes to this:
a frail and failing body
fading slowly.
Tubes and cables wind round
the unravelling of your life.
Eyes closed, mouth open,
a feeble, vein-traced hand
not feeling the starched sheet
covering your wasting away.

And so it comes to this:
no understanding,
no words of comfort.
no opening of your eyes
to hint that, at the end,
there may be just
the possibility of
contrition.

© Elfstone 26/10/15

I feel I have a bit of a cheek posting anything here, I have been away from the site for so long, but somehow making a poem public validates it in a way that I can't quite explain and at the moment that matters. I think there may be more to come from this situation.

© elfstone (Elfstone on OLD UKA)

UKArchive ID: 35756
Archived comments for And so…


Bozzz on 09-11-2015
And so…
There is a magnetic mix here – sorrow and the beauty of the awful truth – a brilliant piece, my friend…Yours, Bozzz

Author’s Reply:
Gosh – that is a delightful surprise. I genuinely did not know how this would be received just as a piece of poetry; I'm much too close to it. My thanks Bozz.

Elfstone


Mikeverdi on 09-11-2015
And so…
Wonderful, it's all there on the screen. Thanks for posting.

Mike

Author’s Reply:
Thanks Mike – that means a lot to me. (Feeling a bit fragile at the moment.)

Elfstone


Pronto on 09-11-2015
And so…
A fascinating piece that leaves me wanting more. A well deserved knib.

Author’s Reply:
As I said above Pronto, there may be more; I have just written a sonnet about this and may publish it. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. 🙂

Elfstone


Andrea on 09-11-2015
And so…
Extremely moving, Elf. And it's not a cheek at all – you are always welcome here, you know that.

Author’s Reply:
Thank you Andrea! I feel that as I haven't been critting others for some time now that it isn't fair to expect others to crit my work, but I wanted to 'put this out there'. I know I'm worn out at the moment and my judgement isn't good and as I said I'm too close to this to see it clearly.

I'm very chuffed that people have found something worthwhile in this and I'm amazed and delighted at the nomination.

Elfstone


gwirionedd on 09-11-2015
And so…
Excellent poem, very well-expressed. Unexpected ending.

I'm guessing it's about a parent, most likely a father, but I really don't know.

Author’s Reply:
My thanks for your comment gwirionedd. It was my mother in fact (who died on 26th Oct. after 18 months with bone cancer).

Elfstone


stormwolf on 14-11-2015
And so…
Incredible Elf. Well worth the nomination. I can only imagine the pain and although I am facing losing my own mother before too long, reading between the lines it will be different.

Sincere condolences.

Alison x

Author’s Reply:
My thanks for your kind comment Storm. It's been a tough time… and in recent years, putting it all into poetry has helped. I hope it will be different for you and if it is you are very lucky.

Elfstone