a bit controversial

something like a story but in a form of a poem i think.
crits so i can improve it
cause this is kind of unfinshed, i think. i dont really know what i want to do with it.
its something new for me init so crits and commetns and if you are going to rate it, then please tell me why.
thanks
take care

Sorry, I've gone all sloppy on you, I'll try not to do it again, but my other one should make up for this. ;^)

Huge thanks to those who helped me with this poem, your advice was much appreciated, I've compared notes and ended up with this. I've changed the title, but I ain't sure if I like it.

Further ADVICE/CRIT is very welcome.

A "Jiyuritsu" Haikus by Jackson DeVoss (1975-2048)

An old poem reworked.

A topic...always on my mind!

Crit welcome

Tai

Influenced by a lager stained shirt on a bedroom floor the morning after the night before…

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This is the intro from my new and first chapbook of poetry and a short story. I am selling them for $6 each and you can have them sent to you, just contact me via email (not the comments postings please). The story is 'Nothing is Forever' and some of the poems are on here, not all.

I've seen the future of rock 'n' roll and it ain't me.

***WARNING - Over 18's Only! - WARNING***

Erm... I had a little mad moment... mixture of cars, erotica and daftness within poetry.

Not sure if it's worth giving advice/crit but it is welcome.

It's not a case of mirror mirror on the wall, who and what do we really see?

There is a bird in the Philippines called the bleeding-heart dove. It has a streak of red feathers on its chest, as if it had been wounded. As the rainforest is plundered by illegal logging (mostly Japanese) these beautiful birds have now become almost extinct.

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Another "Jiyuritsu" Haiku by Jackson DeVoss (1975-2048)

a poem
crit away............!!! I've made some changes and fixed up the errors you might want to read it again.thanks if you do.

A poem
for eoj,
the morning sort.

A poem...

we keep on wishing
but how many of them come true.
how hard how desperately do we wish for things
but they just never come true

...edited...thanks for comments so far.....xxxlittleditty x

A poem (-;

A Poem

i don't know its just something i feel like i cant explain

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Mona Lisa and the Art of Seduction.

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I need to fink of a title I cant find the right 1
help me out with it.
a poem got repeated words throughout the poem ok.
hope you people like it
crits welcomes so are comments


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'Cover' from "The State of Montana" by Maxim Jakubowski. As much crit as poss please. It's long-winded and any suggestions for cuts appreciated.

A young man's heart in a mature man's mind, causing immature feelings

Wrote this sat at my desk... having glanced at my CD collection. Forever growing...

The mind plays the cruelest tricks

Ahah, the 'missing sub'! Had to re-post though... A Sestina. Sad and depressing, as my stuff often is! Hazy x (PS. Sorry about all the bold, I had probs as per with spacing, etc and this is a way round it) ===========================

To counteract the impression that I 'don't do poetry' here's another. I think I've been watching too many of those films....

a poem
a bit of a message to everyone as well i think
hope you like it

Inspired by the plight of a friend.

Written decades ago in grade school. A poem about the American Civil War by Jackson DeVoss (1975 - 2048)

Putting ya foot down!


All advice/crit very welcome...

by Jackson DeVoss (1975 - 2048)

This angry rant is not directed at Muslims in general, only those who deliver terror.

(Andrea, feel free to pull)

The stuff of life! We all have them.


Crit welcome

No re-writes please.

Smiling

Tai

something i did a bit after a guy asked me out...who is sucha prick and a player.
its kind of funny i think it is anyways
hope you like it
you can crit as much as you want lolz
cause i know it most probably is really crap
i was going to put this is 'comedy genre' but there isnt one so i just left it on poetry...

The Male menopause thing.

Something I thought of whilst on a bus going to Manchester... I can't remember why. This is a bit random... my stuff usually has more feeling to it. But hey, randomness is the key!

Poem

Something I wrote a while ago. Read, decipher, enjoy, comment... whatever. :P Jenn.

old poem 1992 ...hope you enjoy...

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I put this up to remind me! Some may have seen it before, when I first came to UKA, I popped it in error on a forum! tut tut

Crit welcome, No re-writes please

Ever optimistic!

Tai

I wrote this a while ago... It's a general poem in the fact that everyone can relate to it on some level... getting to know someone. :) Thanks for reading....

Jenn

They swoop by night.........