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  • Belcanto

    From belcanto on Scream if you want to go faster.

    The sheer cadence of sound – your instinctive use of alliteration and evocative, innovative imagery – is just so lovely. Line after line, verse after verse, you weave and lay this tapestry on us:

    when dogma had left me soul-dead,
    cracked-tongue thirsting

    the cleansing, healing rain…
    The crashing power of the angry sea.

    Not dusty diatribes
    of confusing constriction,
    condemning life-force urgings,

    The title and your resolution are wonderful. So apt. They work beautifully. Great pic and audio, too.

    Some re-ordering of ideas, and a small edit here and there, might make this an even stronger piece, imo. But a stand-out, as is, for me. πŸ™‚

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    2016/07/29 at 10:29 pm
  • Slovitt

    From slovitt on Scream if you want to go faster.

    great closing lines

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    2016/07/29 at 1:27 pm
  • Gerry

    From gerry on Volcanic disruption...

    Yes it was an amazing dream Luigi and quite prophetic! We eventually got off the island and back home but alas our luggage didn’t make it. Maybe it is at the bottom of the sea in that unfortunate boat πŸ˜‰
    Thanks for your comment…
    gerry.

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    2016/07/29 at 11:57 am
    • Ionicus

      From ionicus on Volcanic disruption...

      I am afraid that luggage has a life all of its own, Gerry. Once, on a visit to Italy,
      I had two suitcases; one went to Milan airport and the other to Venice. πŸ™„

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      2016/07/29 at 12:19 pm
  • Gerry

    From gerry on Sleep Memories

    I’m glad someone else appears to be have slight memory problems. I wish my secondary one would kick in–because my primary one has disappeared altogether. I can still dream though πŸ˜‰ You have obviously put a lot of thought into this.

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    2016/07/29 at 11:41 am
    • Gothicman

      From gothicman on Sleep Memories

      Hahaha! Tally-ho in the race to be the first foxy Grandmaster! Thanks Gerry, medical engineer extraordinaire (ret.) for putting your hand up, good to make your acquaintance again. But, it’s not really a memory problem, more something very strange and interesting, even while being somewhat eerie knowing that strings of perfectly logical thoughts are occurring in the background beyond direct awareness. I’ve tried to work out what would trigger them, why just then etc. but haven’t twigged what’s spooking the mind yet! It may be to do with stress and a loosening of psychical cohesion. This is not voices, or anything like that, never frightening or threatening in any way, just thoughts that are familiar but not belonging to anything one feels are memory facilitations of something that has actually happened or been thought about before. Anyway a few more points in the bag! Hahaha!
      Goth, the spoil sport!

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      2016/07/30 at 2:10 pm
      • Gerry

        From gerry on Sleep Memories

        Goth, If I was still working I would have you on the MR scanner very quickly., Or maybe a CT scan would do. It would have to be at the correct time though. I need to see in your brain — sounds very-very interesting πŸ˜‰
        PS never been interested in points—only points of view πŸ˜‰
        gerry.

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        2016/07/30 at 4:53 pm
  • Gerry

    From gerry on Scream if you want to go faster.

    Sounds like you may be on to a good thing there Storm πŸ˜‰ Very expressive writing…I must look Shamanism up now…

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    2016/07/29 at 11:31 am
    • Stormwolf

      From stormwolf on Scream if you want to go faster.

      Haha, thanks Gerry. I wanted to portray the huge feeling of being maybe even more than alive…certainly coming home..I found in shamanism. It is not a religion BTW It’s a way of being in the world.
      Thanks so much for commenting
      . Alison x
      For sure I feel much more at home with the name Storm as well!!! πŸ˜‰

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      2016/07/29 at 2:29 pm
  • Ionicus

    From ionicus on Volcanic disruption...

    It was a good dream until it lasted, Gerry. πŸ™‚ At least it wasn’t a nightmare.
    A well-crafted piece.

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    2016/07/29 at 11:25 am
  • Gerry

    From gerry on Dead Clever

    How on earth did these two ever get to go on holiday together? Quite a complicated plot but made me laugh πŸ˜‰

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    2016/07/29 at 11:22 am
    • Pronto

      From pronto on Dead Clever

      Thanks Jerry, glad you had a laugh. A pisspotical plot for sure but then it was meant to be. πŸ™‚

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      2016/07/29 at 12:39 pm
  • Ionicus

    From ionicus on Dead Clever

    Very amusing, Tony. I have included this piece in the guest’s page of my website and it can also be read here:
    http://gigipagano.wixsite.com/mysite/guest-s-page

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    2016/07/29 at 11:04 am
  • Gerry

    From gerry on Always Alone With a Phone

    Nice one, I wonder what the circled guy is really thinking…

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    2016/07/26 at 10:04 am