Beautiful creates images in the mind like a painting of words, no criticism and just deserved praise, you had me by mentioning the wren straight at the start
Echo everything Keith said; excellent internal rhythms and sardonic commentary. With Trump and Johnson set loose on the English speaking world I’m glad I’m living over here. A very clever piece of writing, Jim.
Ha ha! I absolutely agree with your views. In fact, the harsh words in the poem may not be very fair, but they depict the overall religious ecosystem of the world.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Best.
Supratik
Hi there,
I love this enchanting word picture. Very evocative. I spent five days in the Black Mountains on an RN endurance trial. Along Offa’s Dyke; peering over the cliff edge above Abergavennie. We slept one night in the porch of a fabulous small church on the slopes above a narrow valley. Painted icons on the walls; simple rough wood pews. Your verse brought it all back in surround-sound and cinemascope…
cheers,
Jim
Oh wow, Jim, that’s a lovely description worth another poem! When I was 16 ( some time ago) I went as an exchange pupil from Germany to a boarding school near Abergavenny. Unfortunately I got a sinus infection ( the cold weather) which prevented me from further exploring that lovely landscape. However I made it up Snowden! I made up for it now in my poem….
Religions need to leave,
For the world to heave
A euphoric sigh of relief.
Hi Supratik,
I’ve read this three or four times. There’s a lot to it, but for me those last three lines say it all – and very eloquently.Enjoyed I very much…
cheers,
Jim
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