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  • Sweetwater

    From sweetwater on Metaphysical

    I very much like the deep thinking in this poem. Sue.

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    2017/08/17 at 4:31 pm
  • Sweetwater

    From sweetwater on Hope Springs Eternal

    I totally agree with all you say here Trevor, how can we know sheer joy and gratitude if we have never suffered from their loss? It’s coming across the wondrous unexpected view or being given a surprise gift ‘ just because’: their worth cannot be counted in pounds simply because they are beyond price.
    Also for me the length of this poem is perfect, if I have to wade through reams of verses to reach the point the writer is trying to make I rarely even begin. Sue. X

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    2017/08/16 at 9:02 am
  • Stormwolf

    From stormwolf on Turning Point.

    What a stunning poem. Atmospheric, evoking such rich mental imagery and emotion. Also what a terrible shame to see no comments. ;-(
    What is up with folk?
    Allow me to nominate it to go with your existing nib.
    A fav for me too.
    Alison x

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    2017/08/16 at 8:37 am
    • Sweetwater

      From sweetwater on Turning Point.

      Wow Alison thank you so much for your lovely comment and the nomination, I apologise for such a late reply, I hadn’t expected any comments and certainly not a nomination. so pleased you have put it in favs too Thank you again ๐Ÿ™‚ Sue xx

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      2017/08/16 at 7:10 pm
  • Sweetwater

    From sweetwater on Waiting.

    Hi Alison,
    Thank you so much for such a kind comment it means a great deal to me to know you thought so well of it.
    August here has been so cold and dull it gives the feeling that autumn is but a step away and although I love the autumn, the older I am becoming the more precious warmth and light seem to be. Sue xx

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    2017/08/16 at 8:27 am
  • Sweetwater

    From sweetwater on My True Poem

    Amazing write Alison, verses three and four particularly resonate with me as it has taken me a long time to find confidence in my writing.
    It’s a very in depth thoughtful piece drawing me in and making me really think about why we write. Sue.

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    2017/08/15 at 9:13 pm
    • Stormwolf

      From stormwolf on My True Poem

      Thanks for reading and commenting Sue.
      I agree, it takes courage to post our work on an open forum where it may or may not be well received.
      the ego intrudes and the devil on our shoulder tells us all sorts of negative things such as “what will people think? Will people laugh or scorn?”
      However I believe that is the way of transformation and progress as your work has demonstrated.
      It also takes time to develope our own style. I don’t know if I have done that as my style changes here and there but you certainly have your own style now.
      upwards and onwards! ๐Ÿ˜‰
      Alison x

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      2017/08/16 at 8:31 am
  • Gothicman

    From gothicman on My True Poem

    Yes, I agree, Alison, each life has all the variations, all the richness, to be a multifaceted poem of epic proportions, and in fact, all the pieces we write, are but reflective and revealing sequences of this long journey, with some more directly presented than others. Poetry differs, as you say, from journal report by bravely laying the emotional core bare, but only if the writer is able to first reach down into innermost self and then as honestly and accurately as possible express the unabridged, or uncompromised, truth he/she finds there. The guiding light is probably the emotional feel while creating, and too, the therapeutic catharsis that will follow, by allowing this emotional content to surface in the motor discharge of words. Yes, poetry is Life, and Life is poetry, and like your revelation above, a philosophical understanding, or recognition, of this fact is what allows one to reach resignation and contentment throughout life, but especially towards the end. This poem, as with all your other personal poems, are living proof of how you’re brave enough, and poetical enough, to take on these sensitive and challenging assignments.
    As layout goes, I would go in edit, and highlight each block on the left in turn and indent them in a few times times to bring them a little closer to the blocks on the right. It shouldn’t affect their centring. Spacing is still a problem on here if copied and pasted in from Words and the like, especially on a Mac!
    Much enjoyed!
    LT x

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    2017/08/15 at 10:58 am
    • Stormwolf

      From stormwolf on My True Poem

      Yes, Trev, you have the experience to understand the benefits and the pitfalls.
      I thought later that this relates more to my website (soon to be majorly updated) but in which I lay myself bare, in order to help others not feel so alone. But it has been at a price and so I seldom venture there, even considering deleting it because certain people told me I was leading people astray. ;-(

      “Deflect the blows of mediocrity
      or those who would surreptitiously
      steal the sun from my strangled sky.”

      So I had to go inwards and find the centre of calm in the tornado and re-assess what did I want? Did I want approval? or did I want to be authentic? ‘warts an’ all?’
      I chose to be authentic and the devil take the rest hahaha

      “To risk all to bring a shining shard
      of inner light to darknessโ€ฆ
      by laying my carcass in mid-day heat
      for carrion prey.”

      In this way, poetic expression can, in fact, lead to a deeper understanding of self, as maybe like dreams (in my case) comes straight from the unconscious and once put down on paper it peels off another layer.

      HA x

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      2017/08/15 at 7:10 pm
      • Gothicman

        From gothicman on My True Poem

        It’s funny Alison, we’re both singing from the same hymn sheet with regard to honesty and bravery when searching the root source for inspiration, and even with wanting to convey what we find further on to others. The difference is, your hymn sheet was written in indelible ink, mine in pencil, but it hasn’t stopped us retaining mutual respect for these different points of departure bequeathed to us.
        I used to think that even atheists were “evangelical” in their need to present and promote their views to others too, as most of us like to discuss topics and test then for validity. But, I think that the word “atheist” is an invented insult of the highest arrogance, as there really are only “pure people” and “religiously-afflicted people”? Calling someone an atheist as opposed to a theist, is as daft as calling someone an “aPotterite” because they hadn’t read Harry Potter!
        I suppose knowing the irrevocable nature of early-instituted belief structures, one shouldn’t really challenge them as any criticism, however well presented, will inevitably come over as unhelpful attempts to mock, especially as so many have based a large part of their self-functioning on getting peer approval and promoting that which has been indoctrinated in them, and, of course, nearly all think erroneously that the beliefs in their self-structures have been arrived at from free choice and can be reassessed according to argument and evidence.
        I don’t really think my anti-religious writings affects how people look at themselves or membership interest, or the workings of your spiritual site. However, if more members, apart from Jim, were to continually submit work promoting religion, I might well be put off from wanting to stay here! Hahaha!
        The other difference between you and me, is that you’re a talented approved poet, I’m just someone who writes things (to keep my english free from rust).
        In friendship,
        LT x

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        2017/08/16 at 7:37 am
        • Stormwolf

          From stormwolf on My True Poem

          Oh I understand EXACTLY what you are saying Trev. We could have some very interesting philosophical discussions!
          The thing is I am the least ‘religious’ person you could meet, spiritual yes. I broke out of conditioning many years ago and have continued to evolve. This has been a very personal and at times lonely in the way of spiritual loneliness for as things changed I found I no longer fitted in anywhere. ๐Ÿ™
          Not in the New Age Movement (orchestrated in many ways) or the conventional church which I left years ago.

          I have now found my tribe after a lifetime searching and it’s a global tribe dedicated to awakening the spirit to understand the level of slavery by organised religion and misplaced fear.
          So, in some ways my hymn book is in indelible ink as you say….but only due to un unshakeable conviction I am a spiritual being have an earthly experience.
          I lay my beliefs out openly for others to accept or reject. It all depends on their individual path and each must find their own path to the truth…so I actually detest those who want to convert anybody to anything. I try to take ‘eagle vision’ and fly above the forest.
          For years I fought against the New World Order now manifesting, as I saw what was going to happen but recently I have even transcended that level of consciousness for it’s fear based and we are called to live fearless lives.
          I will still try to bring awareness to the terrible things befalling us in medicine, poisoning of the air, water, land etc but I will not live in that level.

          I also think the site is becoming dull, lacking in vibrancy and jaded. I do feel if more people indulged in discussions such as these about the impetus or say content of a poem, it would be beneficial all round as others could see what motivated the author and things take on a new dimension.
          No doubt there are some who would contend that is not what the site is for but there’s surely room for all?

          I am going to try to post a video here to give you a better idea of my perspective. Great discussion, thank you Ha x

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          2017/08/16 at 8:19 am
  • Gothicman

    From gothicman on Waiting.

    Yes, leaves will soon be changing hue and the newly cast off trying to root anew. Another metaphorical little gem from your pen, Sue. I detected yesterday for the first time, that iron bite tinge of approaching Autumn in the air, bringing on the usual melancholic feel too. Your poem much enjoyed.
    Trevor

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    2017/08/15 at 10:23 am
    • Sweetwater

      From sweetwater on Waiting.

      Hi Trevor, thank you for your comment I am very pleased you enjoyed this somewhat brief poem, it was going to be longer but as it had already said all I needed it to I didn’t want to clutter it up so to speak.
      I’m dog sitting at my daughter’s country cottage ( 1650 ) and we are surrounded by beautiful traditional countryside and life at the moment is pure joy. Sue.

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      2017/08/16 at 8:39 am
  • Stormwolf

    From stormwolf on Waiting.

    Hi Sue,
    You have learned how to prune your work down to a fine art. There is great skill in such very short poems done correctly.
    There is a strong feeling of philosophical reflection in this. Even a certain surrender…
    Excellent work.

    Alison x

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    2017/08/14 at 12:08 pm
  • Stormwolf

    From stormwolf on My True Poem

    Just to say, layout in this case inintentional. It looked perfect on preview but reverts to this layout on posting!
    Layout altered successfully now in case anybody wondering ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    2017/08/14 at 10:25 am
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