Dark Dreamer.
Just jotting a few lines down and I arrived here.
All things wild
are dancing,
dancing where
the night winds
haunt,
to carry dreams
across the sky,
in folds
of midnight’s
blue,
there capture
you with sirens
song,
and bind within
a silver cage.
To be forever
mine.
Nothing wrong with words Sue, not keen on the lay out.
Mike XxX
You know me and layout Mike 😉 help? Again I have tried as many variations as I can think of, I simply don’t have an eye for layout. But I am pleased you like the words to me that’s vital 🙂 thank you xxx
All things wild are dancing,
dancing where
the night winds haunt,
to carry dreams across the sky,
in folds of midnight’s blue.
There capture you
with sirens song, and bind within
a silver cage.
To be forever
mine.
this was centered when I posted it, cant seem to work the new system.
You’ve nailed it Mike, spot on, I love it, basically the same layout but compact.
You have such a great eye for such things, thank you so much. I will amend this afternoon. Sue xxx
Re layout- Just a suggestion Sue.
Re Poem- I like the feeling of abandonment that suddenly becomes trapped, it made me think of Meet Joe Black when William Parish says to his daughter “I want you to sing with rapture and dance like a dervish” enjoyed Keith
All things wild are dancing, dancing
where the night winds haunt,
to carry dreams across the sky,
in folds of midnight’s blue,
there capture you with sirens song,
and bind within a silver cage.
To be forever mine
Thank you Keith, I appreciate your comment and helpful suggestion, I don’t know the film you mention but reading what you wrote In relation to the poem, it puts a different slant on what I was thinking as I wrote it, which is very interesting. While you see the first verse as joyful abandonment I saw it as wild frenzied creatures ready to go out hunting their prey, under the cover of a dark night with the idea in their heads how best to get what they want, lure it in for capture, then carry it back to their leader.… Read more »
Lovely imagery in this Sue. I do quite like Keith’s suggestion for layout too.
Eira
Thank you Eira, I’m glad you liked it. I am still looking at different layouts, but Keith’s is rather good. Sue.
Are you still thinking of the songster in this poem? I don’t know why you break into the rhythm with your format. Why not
‘All things wild are dancing,
dancing where the night winds haunt,’
Your images confuse me. Maybe I’m just not able to understand your metaphors, but I wonder if you can indeed capture anyone in a siren’s song, whether in the folds of midnight blue or not, and put him in a silver cage. Silver cage is too solid. Am I being too pragmatic? if so, pay no attention to me.
No, I wasn’t thinking of anyone in particular I was reading someone else’s poem and something in it ( not the words, a feeling ) caught my eye and this poem was written from that feeling. Mike also suggested the layout you mentioned, I had amended but for some reason it didn’t adjust on the site. As for capturing in a siren’s song what about sailors being lured to their death by a sirens song, the siren being a mermaid, that’s what was in my mind anyway. It was just a bit of fairy tale whimsy really. I suppose it… Read more »