Well, for someone who “can’t write poetry, you’re doing very well! rhythm and rhyme are good – except for the last line of v1. Why on earth didn’t you write ‘before I meet death’s sleep ‘? To get the rhyme with’ keep’?
Oh, there’s a typo – land’s
Otherwise, good job!
Well, for someone who “can’t write poetry, you’re doing very well! rhythm and rhyme are good – except for the last line of v1. Why on earth didn’t you write ‘before I meet death’s sleep ‘? To get the rhyme with’ keep’?
Oh, there’s a typo – land’s
Otherwise, good job!
Thank you E=Griff. Corrections made.
This is really very good, yes I could wish for fewer unnecessary words and all that stuff, but bugger it…I really do like it. Well done.
Mike
Thank you again Mikeverdi, so pleased you enjoyed it.